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Old 06-03-2017, 07:33 PM   #1
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Name:Jukoto Tomo
Age: 17
Sex: Male
Height: 6’3

Character Type: Shinobi

Country/Village: Iwagakure
Rank: Chuunin
Division:YAMA-Soldier

Physical Description: Like all other Jukoto, the main feature that resonates with others is the height of the clan members. Despite his age, at six foot three he towers over most of his other teenage peers. He has a lean physique that ripples with muscle due to his body having a natural consumption of carbon at an accelerated rate. His skin is tan in color and despite having multiple scars the body seems to be in pristine condition. He has blue eyes and longer than normal brown hair that is usually put into a spiky side design.


Clothing: On a normal day, Tomo has sandy beige commando pants that loosely fit around his lower half while staying tight around his waist. The pants themselves have large main pockets to the side of the hip and three other smaller pockets cascading down each leg, and two back pockets which gives a total of ten pockets.

A more fitting green wife beater is worn on his upper half to exemplify his physique. An sewn in insignia of Stone is embroider on the right upper half of his shirt. Tomo loves to wear his sunglasses and is almost never caught without them. However, when a fight gets too serious, the sunglasses are taken off and kept in one of his pockets.

Personality: Tomo has never been the type of person to let things go to his head. He has always been cool and collected in most situations and despite being still young and in his teenage years, he seems to show wisdom far beyond the number that is placed on him. He had always been fascinated with the idea that he was different and because of this he likes to share for people in his hereditary gift. Despite the pain it might cause he has no issue showing off what his body can do and he will always go out of his way to help others.

When interacting with his peers Tomo is known to be light hearted and fun. Despite the immense pain he must be in, he never really shows it on his face. He is a strong willed individual and he knows that his family name is of great importance to the Village. He feels like he has to be strong for everyone else to be. Because of this he often puts himself in precarious situations.

When interacting with individuals of higher rank he has the upmost respect and listening to the call of duty to the letter. He is not one to stray far from the path and hopes to one day take on more responsibility and become a well-known shinobi of Stone.

Within a battle or on a mission, Tomo is concentrated and puts all his efforts into success. He knows his body is unique and can take on more than some others and because of that he considers himself to go head first into a situation, despite the danger.

Nindo; "Way of the Ninja": Mind as strong as body

Clan/Bloodline:Jukoto

Primary Archetype: Ninjutsu Specialist
Special: When taken as Primary Archetype, the character receives a free Stage One jutsu from a universal Ninjutsu list.
Primary: Chakra
Secondary: Own Choice
Tertiary: Own Choice
Stat Merit: +2 to Power, +1 to Control
Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Tactics
Secondary Archetype: Jukoto Bloodline Specialist
Special: Adds one point to Power. Not required to be primary.
Primary: Chakra
Secondary: Physical
Tertiary: Mental
Stat Merit: +1 Strength, +1 Reserves, +1 Power
Stat Flaw: -1 Intelligence, -1 Tactics, -1 Speed
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Statistics

Physical Secondary 27

Strength: 1+1[JBS]-2[NS]+10[pool]=10+15[FGF]=25
Speed: 1-1[JBS]+8[pool]=8
Stamina: 1+9[pool]=10+14[FGF]=24

Mental Tertiary 24

Intelligence: 1-1[JBS]+8[pool] + 1[TP] = 9
Tactics: 1-1[JBS]-1[NS]+9[pool]=8
Willpower: 1+7[pool]=8

Chakra Primary 30

Power: 1+1[JBS]+2[NS]+11 +2[TP] [pool]=17
Control: 1+1[NS]+10[pool]=12
Reserves: 1+1[JBS]+9[pool]=11

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Jutsu and Techniques:
Haganekifu
Stage 3
Requirements: Power 11, Control 9, Stamina 8

Fierce God Fist
Stage Three: [Jutsu 1-3]
Stat Requirements: Strength 10, Stamina 10, Willpower 8
Stage Bonuses: +5 Strength, +4 Stamina
Special Techniques:[Jutsu 4-5]
Name: Kishin Ago (Fierce God Jaw)
Requirement: Strength 8, Stamina 8, Speed 6
Name: Kishin Sentou (Fierce God Punch)
Requirements: Willpower 8, Tactics 6, Intelligence 8



Ninjutsu Global
Stage 1[Archetype Freebie]
Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Switch Technique)
Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 2

Doton Ninjutsu
Stage 1[Jutsu 6]
Doton: Tsuchi Gunjikoudou no Jutsu (Earth Military Movement)
Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 3

Stage 2[Jutsu 7]
Doton: Iwa Bunshin no Jutsu (Stone Clone)
Requirements: Intelligence 7, Tactics 7, Control 6

Doton: Rikujou Douyou no Jutsu (Ground Shaking)[Jutsu 8]
Requirements: Power 7, Control 7, Intelligence 6

Metal Ninjutsu
Stage 1[Jutsu 9]
Metal: Shield
Requirements: Power 3, Willpower 2

Stage 2[Jutsu 10]
Metal: Wire
Requirements: Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4

Metal: Shuriken[Jutsu 11]
Requirements: Power 6, Control 6, Intelligence 4

Stage 3
Heavy Metal: Thallium[Jutsu 12]
Requirements: Power 10, Control 10, Willpower 8


Inventory:
Shinobi Kit
Item Points Remaining:8

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Biography:
Pain was the most common feeling for Tomo being a Jukoto. Ever since his birth he has had to contend with the pain of his skin turning into steel. At the young age of two he had already begun to experience his birth rite and pain enveloped his body whenever he would crawl. Only from pure exhaustion and pain would the young Tomo subside his tears. Despite this, Tomo excelled through his milestones and surpassed some of his peers and putting him in the top percentile of his age group.

When it was time for the academy Tomo had already began to relish and see his skin as a curse and a blessing. Throughout the training his father had given him to prepare for the academy he had learned that his steel body could become his only weapon. Despite being unable to control the production of carbon, Tomo was able to realize that reflexively his body was more durable than most people his age.

Having Jukoto Daisuke as the Kage put a lot of stress on the young Tomo and he felt like he had to be the best in the class. However, there were others that were just as willing to become as strong. Despite having skin that could turn to steel, each time it did Tomo would feel immense pain. When it came to sparring Tomo would start off great and then towards the end his pain would overcome his body to the point that he had to secede from the match. Frustration began to develop in his mind and Tomo started to feel less and less inclined to participate in spar matches. Unwilling to allow his son to do such a thing, his father forced him to take the drug Tantetsu to make sure that he could handle the stress of the academy.

The drug was a wonder and despite still feeling pain from the skin transformation Tomo was able to finish sparring matches. Because of this Tomo decided that his fists would be his best weapons. He saw himself as a biological weapon at this point and saw no need for blades. The second year is where Tomo began to shine. Despite his age, he began to exhibit a great deal of control as to where his skin would transform. Once a reflex to be used only defensively, Tomo was now able to create steel fists to crush his opponents.

Tomo never let his power envelop him and always saw himself as an asset and a friend to each stone shinobi. His peaceful demeanor and calculated attacks created an aura of respect and not fear which attracted many of his peers. Soon enough Tomo was the most popular team member and even though most enjoyed this, there was one kid that did not. The boy in question is named Roshi Toshi. Toshi had a knack for large blades and despite his stature seemed to have a lot of strength. The culmination of Tomo and his academy years would be put to the test in a spar against Toshi.

Happiness and cheering filled the sky as the academy students graduated. Tomo ahead of his class seemed to get the most praise and was the only Jukoto to be within the class. At that point he had many friends and was quite popular with the teachers as well. Towards the end of the celebration Toshi declared a spar against Tomo. At first reluctant, Tomo felt he owed Toshi something.

The fighting coliseum was not far from the graduation so the battlefield was decided. The stone coliseum was adorned by the marble statues of each Tsuchikage and would serve as a fine place for the fight. The statues would serve as the witnesses of who is the best genin. The fight started off awkward as Toshi flung his blade around Tomo, luckily, the speed at which the blade moved was too slow and Tomo was able to get within the guard. With a swift punch Tomo landed a direct and steel infused hit towards the ribcage of the young genin. The force of the hit blasted Toshi far from Tomo and even farther from his blade that fell where the attack had hit. Now without a weapon the annoyed and jealous genin disappeared under the ground. Tomo was aware of this jutsu and prepared. However, no preparation would save him from the attack that arrived next. A blade of stone erupted from the ground and pierced the young Jukoto. Too quick to create his steel armor, the skin around the wound began to rapidly materialize the carbon. However, now a stone weapon impaled the young genin.

The pain was unbearable and it was not hatred that Tomo felt but confusion as to why the boy now walking away from him hated him so much. Fainting from the immense pain Tomo awoke in the hospital. A few people were overlooking the fight and once it was obviously over they rushed to aid Tomo back to the hospital and fix his wounds. Even though he had been the top of his class, he now knew what it really took to survive in the shinobi world. A moment worrying about the other person might cost your life. Life went on without Tomo for a time and because of his rehabilitation he was now far behind his age group. Once his arm had healed and he was ready to assume the duty of a genin he was put on a team. The team itself was nothing stellar and despite Tomo’s lack of recent training he still excelled compared to the others.

Most of his genin years were filled with simple retrieval mission and keeping the peace within the Cities and Towns of Earth Country. The war had ravaged the country and Tomo never knew a different life and was used to seeing poverty and destruction. It saddened him for a time and on rare occasions the group fought against people that feared and despised the shinobi. As the years went Tomo grew to harness his skills and soon enough his team was invited to attend the chuunin exams at the age of fifteen.

The Chuunin Exams were unique and something Tomo had never witnessed before. Being a Jukoto at that time meant a lot and Tomo felt a mass amount of pressure to show his bloodline off. He towered over most of the competitors but he still lacked the skill that some of them might have had. Tomo had yet to kill a person and that is something that might put him at a disadvantage. The first test was a simple one for him as a retrieval of scroll was all that was necessary. Being able to swim through the ground allowed him to retrieve it without being seen. The next was a team based event that forced his group to overcome a battle royal. Three teams were each put into a circle and the one team that had the most teammates at the end advanced. Luckily, for Tomo, his partners were well known for using Doton and were able to quickly move the field around to their desire. Mudslides and rock pellets forced all of their competitors out. The final test would be a tournament; one that would make people see Tomo’s true strength.

Tomo excelled using his steel body to propel him through to the finals where he faced off against a well-known Hyuuga from the Leaf Village. This particular Hyuuga had destroyed every opponent in front of him and Tomo was next. The battle started off like he figured. Flurries upon flurry of attacks echoed onto the body of Tomo, his skin unable to keep up with the speed of his opponents fists. Not only was the pain building from the concussive shots of the boys fingers, but the curse of his bloodline had forced many pockets of steel skin to outcrop around him. Exhausted by the situation Tomo took one last stand against the boy.

First creating a stone clone to rush against the Hyuuga, Tomo descended into the ground. Swimming towards his target he hoped the clone would be enough to slow him down to attack. Both Tomo and his clone arrived at the Hyuuga simultaneously and both struck. However, a vortex of wind propelled them away before Tomo could make a true attack. Only able to scratch the skin of his opponent he was nearly knocked out of the ring. At this point Tomo was exhausted and stood up very slowly. With a smile on his face the Hyuuga rushed Tomo, knowing that one more attack would be enough.

However, the small cut proved to be the real attack as the Hyuuga started to show signs of poison. His full sprint had slowly went to a crawl as he clenched his stomach and head. Wasting no time Tomo knew this was his last chance and with a final steel infused punch he landed a direct hit on the chin of the Hyuuga, subsequently sending him up a few feet and out of the ring. Tomo was awarded chuunin rank not because of his steel skin but because he was able to use other faucets to achieve his goal, as well as show perseverance against a stronger opponent. The culmination of this gave new hope to Tomo as he returned back home making the Jukoto name proud. Having a Kage within your clan really pushed you to strive and the next two years Tomo did just that. Tomo found himself spending numerous nights out on rescue missions or missions to provide care and medicine to the poor. He enjoyed his work and it made him feel like he was really doing something. He felt more attuned to the country as a whole and it was up until the Jindori incident that he thought there would be peace between country and village.

Life changed for Tomo during the aftermath of the Jondori Earthquake. Now being a seasoned shinobi of Iwagakure he knew that his purpose was to save as many people as he could but when arriving to the aftermath of the quake it made him realize how small he really was. Cries of pain and fear resonated through his ears as Tomo attempted to save as many people as possible, only saving a mother and her daughter he was crushed by the thought that the father would never be found. It took him a good few days to recover from the sight. Being a shinobi had its perks but at that moment Tomo had to be strong for his clan, especially since Daisuke decided to relinquish the mantle for a younger Tschuikage in the form of Hajime Hagane. To Tomo there was nothing wrong with the transition and it was just the rumors of why someone as strong as a Jukoto would relinquish such power. Despite being within the same clan, that was the last time Tomo saw Daisuke. Riots began to erupt throughout the country and Tomo was sent to the front lines.

If not for his skin he would have been impaled a few times, angry civilians seemed to try and ambush Tomo at every opportunity and although he used force to quell the riots he never thought to kill. He had tried hard to save these people and to see them turn on him broke his heart. Rumors began to circulate of rogue shinobi with Force Jewels that were the reason for the riots and a secret organization was at work. Unaware of anything Tomo continued to follow orders and when Hagane established the Yellow Ribbon Army, he placed himself to continue on the front lines as a soldier in the YAMA Division. Within a couple of months the rumors became true and the new enemy of Iwagakure was the people of earth Country.

Using Daichi City as their base a coalition of civilians headed by the Force Jewel rogue shinobi began to fight against Iwagakure. The Battle of Daichi was intense to say the least and it was only up to that point that Tomo had never faced a Force Jewel user. Little was unknown about it and Tomo never really considered obtaining one. He felt his own skin was powerful enough. The battle for the city raged on around him as he squared up against a shinobi that had a protruding green jewel in his head. Everything he touched seem to turn into a projectile and luckily, Tomo could deal quite well against him. As the battle ended Tomo attempted to save a civilian but as he reached to help the young boy he tried to stab him right in the chest. If not for his steel skin, his heart would have been pierced. Unable to even think of what to do next, the civilian was struck down by another Iwa-shinobi.

It was at that moment that Tomo knew words or good deeds would not be enough to sway the peoples mind. Returning to the Village after the successful taking of the City Tomo swore to now only put Iwagakure first and the civilians will follow.
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Old 06-03-2017, 09:14 PM   #2
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In your jutsu, you have a list unlabeled.
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good start no doubt....fixed that
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Old 06-04-2017, 12:54 AM   #4
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Okay, a couple general things:

a) Genin experience completely glossed over. For a character with only three years of life as a full fledged shinobi, that's a lot of time to just get rid of.

b) Timeline issues!

If Tomo was 12 when he graduated, then he was 14 at the Exams. If his Exam was ~1 year ago it happened AFTER the Earthquake and may have even been the Engi Time 0.00 Exam in Leaf.

At any rate, by your own math, there is no feasible way that 'years' passed between receiving the Jewel and now, unless Tomo graduated earlier than normal.

c) Mentally unstable child is given a Force Jewel essentially because Jukoto. There is nothing to make Tomo seem like a healthy, qualified, skilled candidate besides his family name - which I imagine is precisely why the bio implicates that his father more or less stole the Jewel for him??? This is basically the exact thing I asked you not to do.

You need to elaborate on what Tomo has done, who he has met, why he would ever be trusted with a Jewel after he had a well-publicized roid rage episode that resulted in a murder that he doesn't even remember.

Overall, you have been here too long for me to think you don't know better.
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Ok, lets try this again....pretty much a complete overhaul of the dude
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Old 06-05-2017, 05:39 PM   #6
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Now, this, I can get behind. Good work!

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Old 06-07-2017, 05:06 PM   #7
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Whose got two thumbs and hasn't been removed from the Elder's group? This loser right here.

I'm a little rusty but I believe all the stats check out. That's quite a biography too. I'd be a bit wary of name dropping Hyuugas like that but I mean it's 2017 and who cares about those dorks anyway.

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Old 06-10-2017, 01:52 PM   #8
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Edit: Correct me if I'm wrong but you're 3 jutsu over the cap? 3 Stages of the bloodline + 12 Jutsu?
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I'm pretty sure for the Jukoto you don't have to take every stage of their bloodline list. So really it's 13, Archetype Specialist + 12 = 13. The Jukoto are an odd bloodline.
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So you get a bunch of free techs for the price of one list? That's dope.

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