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Old 01-30-2014, 11:37 AM   #1
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Default Mist chuunin Ryuunosuke Yuudai

Name: Ryuunosuke Yuudai
Age: 16
Sex: male
Height: 4'11"

Character Type: shinobi
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Rank: Chuunin
Division: Navy, sailor

Physical Description: Two things are very noticeable when meeting Ryuunosuke Yuudai for the first time: the first being his small stature, the second is his distinct lack of any color. Yuudai has always been without color, from his white hair to his gray eyes. Yuu has long shooulder length hair that always falls limply to gravity's whim. Yuu's skin is very pale, as though he never goes out to meet the sun. A network of thin scars covers Yuu's cold clammy skin, at a glance one might mistake these signs of battles fought as a road map. Yuu, despite looking very scrawny has a lot of muscle hidden over his compact frame. Yuu has a face that speaks of arrogance and hardship. He holds himself with confidence and always tries to stand as tall as his little legs will allow. Yuu always wears a nasty look on his face, like everyday he wakes up to find that he has become shorter during the night. Yuu's eyes are narrow and always glaring down his small pointed nose.


Clothing: Yuu's clothing choices are visually much like himself, they lack pigmentation and are otherwise unremarkable. Yuu wheres his clothing loosely enough from his body to try and hide what strength he does have. His clothing has always been about function. He wears a light gray long sleeved shirt and a slightly darker pair of very plain pants. Yuu leans more towards a slipper type shoe as the standard boots that he would wear are a size too big, these are the darkest shade of gray in his clothing. Yuu wears the mist symbol on his head as a part of a bandana, this bandana is the only way he can keep his hair in check when it matters. The bandana is pure white and this the metal plate has been well tarnished to prevent it from giving away his position when in battle. Yuu likes wears his wakizashi at his back, tucked into his belt. Yuu's clothing is well worn but not thread bare and he does his best to keep the repairs that he sometimes has to make discreet.

Personality: To say that Yuudai has a fiery temper is about like saying dynamite is explosive. Yuu has more complaints logged about him than any other genin has ever gotten and things haven't changed since he been promoted to chuunin. Yuu has always had a short fuse, it stand to reason that anyone ignored as long as Yuu has they might get up close and unavoidable. He's a problem solver as well and doesn't force his way through difficult situations but finds ways through and around then. Yuu's most defining trait would have to be his stubbornness, Yuu will refuse to accept defeat long after anyone else would have given up. Yuu is always looking for something that will prove that his is a great shinobi even if it may cost him his life. Yuu is the type that wont turn away from a fight he thinks he has a chance. He may never meet an enemy combatant head on but Yuu show remarkable awareness of his surroundings and would rather force his opponent to make a mistake and punish him. While Yuu does enjoy combat he does know that the longer a fight goes on the more likely he is to lose. A tactically sound man Yuu will test his foes to determine the quickest way to bring it down. Much like the rats that he grew up with Yuu is extremely comfortable in tight enclosed spaces and has be found sleeping in very odd and potentially dangerous places.

Nindo; "Way of the Ninja": Even a little white rat like me can be a great shinobi if i set my mind to it.

Clan/Bloodline: none
Primary Archetype: Masochistic Trickster
Archetypes: Genjutsu Specialist – Daredevil
Combo Special: Upon entering a thread, the Masochistic Trickster chooses one Genjutsu. After someone hits the user, the one Genjutsu is activated on them, as damaging the user was the trigger. After three posts, the ability recharges. The user can pick a different jutsu if he wants.
Stat Merit: +2 to Willpower, +1 to Intelligence
Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Stamina
Stat Merit: +2 to Stamina, +1 to Willpower
Stat Flaw: -2 to Tactics, -1 to Intelligence


Statistics



Primary
Mental 30/30

Intelligence: 1 (+9 pool) (+3 Thread) Total=13
Tactics: 1 (-2 Archetype) (+12 Pool) Total=11
Willpower: 1 (+3 Archetype) (+9 Pool) Total=13

Secondary
Physical 27/27[/B]

Strength: 1 (-2 Archetype) (+8 Pool) Total=7
Speed: 1 (+11 Pool) Total=12 (+6 Onigokko Kenjutsu)
Stamina: 1 (+1 Archetype) (+ Pool 8) Total=10

Tertiary
Chakra 24/24

Power: 1 (+7 Pool) Total=8
Control: 1 (+9 Pool) Tota= 10
Reserves: 1 (+8 Pool) Total=9

Jutsus and Techniques
Hidden Mist Genjutsu
Stage 1
-Doro Bunshin no Jutsu(Reserves 3, Tactics 3)
Stage 2
-Kirigakure no Jutsu( Reserves 5, Control 4, Power 4)

Chase the Devil Sword Technique
Stage 2(7 Willpower, 7 Tactics, 6 Speed)
Special Techniques
-Blind the Devil
-Tag the Devil

Hidden Mist Ninjutsu
Stage 1
-Mizu Soujuu(Power 4, Control 4)
Stage 2
-Mizutamari no Jutsu (Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4)
-Mizu Shuriken no Jutsu (Power 6, Control 6, Intelligence 4)
Stage 3
-Mizutamari Yusuo no Jutsu (Intelligence 8, Tactics 6, Willpower 8)

Global Ninjutsu List
Stage 1
-Kawarimi no Jutsu(Power 2, Tactics 2)
Stage 2
-Kinobori/Kabenobori no Jutsu(Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4)
Stage 3
-Shukuchi(Intelligence 8, Tactics 8, Willpower 6)



Inventory
Wazakishi - 2
Restraints - 2
Breathing Apperatus - 1
Zoom Goggles - 1
Dagger - 1

Weapon Points Remaining: 1
Additional Weapon Points Gained: 0

Biography: Ryuunosuke Yuudai has been on his own for as long as he can remember. Orphaned from a young age Yuu cant remember if he ever even had parents. Forced to fend for himself in the slums of Kanitoshi Yuu had to learn to survive quickly or starvation would be the least of his worries. Yuu Quickly learned to steal what he could to survive. He would regularly slept in to sewers with the rats, sometimes even find a few of them sleeping on him when he woke to keep themselves warm. He found that the rats would treat him better than the people he would, so he retreated more and more into the sewers only emerging to scavenge what food he steal. Yuu made quite a name for himself among the local merchants and fishermen, not that anyone knew his name. One day a mist shinobi came across the boy while he was stealing a large fish. The shinobi cut Yuu down before he even knew he had been hurt. Finding Yuu not as dead as he should have been, this shinobi dropped him of at the academy on a whim.

Yuu was never liked much in the academy as the mist academy favors the strong. Yuu had never been physically strong in his life and being the runt of the school earned him no friends. Having long forgotten his name the students around him began to call him little white rat and every variation they could think of. It was during this time that he chose the name Ryuunoske Yuudai, a big name for a small boy. Not having a strong body makes you an outcast in a place where strength is everything so Yuu focused on the mental aspect of being a ninja. Not having anyone to distract meant Yuu could focus all of his free time into his genjutsu. When it came time for the selection fights to see who who become a genin Yuu surprised everyone by winning every time.

Yuu's luck never improved after graduation, with his small stature he was given low rank missions, much to the displeasure of his squad mates. Every new mission that came in was always the bottom of the barrel job that no other squad would touch. Yuu and the rest of his sqaud would do them only because they could never get much better despite the continued compaints of the entire squad. During his time as a genin Yuu completed: 13 C-rank missions, 196 D-rank missions, and 458 E-rank missions, more than half of the E-ranked jobs in his first year as a genin.

It took Yuu three years to make chuunin even after. Yuu took part in the chuunin exam on his second year after being denied entrance his first year. Much to Yuu's surprise, everyone refused to fight with him thinking it was a joke. Yuu knew that he would have to take extreme measures if he ever wanted to be taken seriously. He finally got his chance with an A-rank sabotage mission. Yuu undertook this mission alone as his former squad mates had been reassigned to other naval ships. The mission was simple sink or cripple several heavily armed "patrol" boats that had been sweeping further and further into Mist seas with eash new pass.

Yuu and five other squads took six different ships, the name of the game was stealth as the need for deniability would call for no survivors. All teams need to cripple the ships at same time. All the teams went in under the cover of fog, Yuu making use of his own genjutsu fog. The mission for Yuu went quite smoothly as he rigged explosive tags in communication as well as the ships hold that was filled with gunpowder. Yuu made it back to the deck a moment before assigned detonation when one of the crews' more experienced sailors broke free of the genjutsu. The Onigokko Kenjutsu techniques saved him from major injury, and exaggerating the damage allowed him his chance to slip overboard to avoid the huge explosion that followed.

Yuu had to swim back to the command ship half a mile out and hidden in fog as no one bothered to come pick him up. Yuu spent a week recovering from minor hypothermia and bloodloss from his little swim, he also manage pick up what would become a pair of shark skin boots and a nice sharks teeth necklace
that he took back so as to better insult the squads and sailors who thought he'd never live through the mission. He attended the attended his promotion wearing both of these items.

Other Info: Yuu gets unreasonable angry when someone mentions his height negatively, inversely he is more likely to forgive or forget if he is call tall or
the like.

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08/13/14 - Monsoon Madness: +2 Intelligence
04/19/18 - Driftwood: +1 Intelligence, +Mizu Shuriken no Jutsu

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Old 01-30-2014, 12:48 PM   #2
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Hey there. Welcome to Engi! I'm Granspear, the Mist GM, and I've looked over your character.

Typically, I only comment on the bio; it really is the most important part of the character. The rest of the sheet needs some minor tweaks, but the biography is a little bit glaring in that it's one giant block of text. When delving into said block of text, there's a few grammatical mistakes, spelling errors, and dropped words:

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He would regularly in to sewers with the rats...
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...so he reatreated more and more into the sewers only emerging to scavenge what food he steal.
The premise of the character overall isn't a bad one, but for a chuunin, the bio needs more effort put into the telling of the character's story. One thing I will warn you against, though, is what happens at the end of this biography; one thing that tends to get many GM's goats, including my own, is the "poof! PROMOTION!" concept that tends to creep into a biography. Throwing around a number of missions completed is nice and all, but with no detail to back it up, that's all they are--numbers.

I haven't given up on you yet, though. This is fixable.
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Old 01-30-2014, 03:32 PM   #3
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A lot of good points that i need to address, thank you. Its always fresh eyes that spot those errors i that sneak in, so I'm always glad to have those spotted and fixed. Any advice i get to improve my writing is always appreciated. I will get right on fixing this.
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Old 02-03-2014, 08:50 PM   #4
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You awful, awful people who don't include the base archetypes when you take a combo. Do I look like I have time to click three, maybe four times and take thirty seconds to check? Do I?!? Actually that's kind of my job now so you'd be right.

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Primary: Mental
Secondary: Chakra
Tertiary: Physical
Stat Merit: +2 to Willpower, +1 to Intelligence
Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Stamina

Daredevil
Primary: Physical
Secondary: Mental
Tertiary: Chakra
Stat Merit: +2 to Stamina, +1 to Willpower
Stat Flaw: -2 to Tactics, -1 to Intelligence
You have to take the stat blocks from one of the two types you used when you take the combo. Your current spread is

Mental
Physical
Chakra

Which is not allowed, because you can only have one of the two up there in the quote box. It shouldn't be a huge deal to fix, but please adjust accordingly. Note that depending on which stat blocks you decide to take, your tai style might cost more per stage.

I won't check stats yet since you'll probably shuffle them around some, but can you label the 'Pool' stat on Reserves? Just kind of bugs me.

If I'm not miscounting, you have 10 techs picked out. You are allowed 12 for chuunin.

Hopefully none of this is terribly overwhelming. Feel free to PM me if the nuances to the stat distribution is too confusing.
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Old 02-15-2014, 05:35 PM   #5
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Sorry it took so long to fix this, but ive got the issues with my stats archetype, and added two more techniques. I just thought the special techniques from chase the devil had to be included with the chuunin move set. This with help with what i want to do with him.
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Old 02-15-2014, 10:41 PM   #6
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First thing I notice with the stats are that you haven't used all of your pool points in each of your stat groups. Also, the way your stats are formatted is kind of confusing. I think that (Parentheses) and = equal signs would help you, and those who are looking at the sheet.

Descriptions check out for me. Haven't read the bio yet. But I will.
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Old 02-17-2014, 02:49 AM   #7
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I have the stats checked out and updated so they are right by my math. I you want me to add in all the stat flaws and merits that are apart of my archetype rather than my condensed down version that only shows where they move up or down i will. i also added a bit to my descriptions while i editing. i just thought i should throw a bit more into them hopefully this should flesh Yuu out a bit better. If there's anything else i need to do just let me know.
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While I thank you for making your math easier to read, you actually didn't change the math itself. What I meant by not using all your pool points is that each of your stat groups has more points for you to spend. You can't save those points so you should probably spend those now....

Mental Stat Pool Points Total: 30
Mental Stat Pool Points Used: 11 + 8 + 8 = 27

Physical Stat Pool Points Total: 27
Physical Stat Pool Points Used: 10 + 8 + 8 = 26

Chakra Stat Pool Points Total: 24
Chakra Stat Pool Points Used: 6 + 8 + 7 = 21

See what I mean?
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So every stat starts at 1 and then i add in the 30, 27, and 24; is that how it works?
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