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Old 04-13-2017, 12:07 AM   #1
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Ichisuke Koushou is a standard medic genin with a heart of gold and a desire to be class president. Instead he gets to experience the dizzying reality that things go wrong, he's not perfect, and maybe his country doesn't have his best interests in mind.

Taka Tao is a medical chuunin on his way to the top. Focused on succeeding and learning as much about the medical field, he likes to support his team and observe. So when he's thrust into the lead and encouraged to be the superior, he finds himself taking up the mantle with ease. Who'd have thought?

Also starring Merdle as some sneaky shinobi types and some other sneaky sneaks, this thread is fluff and tumble, cute and horrifying. If you're looking for all the feels, come on in. Stay for the burning buildings, cursed seals, and Grass political shitstorms.
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Old 04-13-2017, 01:45 AM   #2
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Old 04-16-2017, 04:18 AM   #3
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DAAAAAAYUUUUMMM!!!!

This thread is some kinda sadness, dudes. Not only is it socially tense at moments, the act of action is also really tense, and as a reader, the moment I heard 'EKD' I was all "Nonononono, girl gon' die". Kou was adorable in this thread. Tao was the sort of helpful so-and-so who calmed down all of the problems Kou made.

The end of this thread really got to me, especially your posts Mizu. Regardless, I like to give individual reviews, since I think that helps the most. I also seem to really like doing thread ratings, because reading other people's writing helps me learn how to read my own writing a little better, as you both are great examples of things done well and examples of personal style that not everyone will agree with.

Mizu:
2 points, one on jutsu




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2 points, one on jutsu.




[that image in this rating stretches my web browser, dude.]
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Old 04-16-2017, 07:02 AM   #4
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I have to say I am truly grateful for your post. I enjoy the fact that you have such amazing determination to help me. Words cant express how this helps and I am glad I got you rating these threads.

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+1 Power and with my new stats I'll take Stage two medical jutsu Zesshi Nensan

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[2] Zesshi Nensan (Con 6, Pow 6, Int 4)

Thanks for the critiques, that exactly stupid line was supposed to be stylistic and I totally see how it missed the mark. I appreciate the feedback, will definitely be fine tuning and revamping some of my phrasing. I look forward to writing with you!
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