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    Name:Jukoto Tomo
    Age: 17
    Sex: Male
    Height:Character Type: Shinobi

    Country/Village: Iwagakure
    Rank: Chuunin
    Division:YAMA-Soldier

    Physical Description: Like all other Jukoto, the main feature that resonates with others is the height of the clan members. Despite his age, at six foot three he towers over most of his other teenage peers. He has a lean physique that ripples with muscle due to his body having a natural consumption of carbon at an accelerated rate. His skin is tan in color and despite having multiple scars the body seems to be in pristine condition. He has blue eyes and longer than normal brown hair that is usually put into a spiky side design.


    Clothing: On a normal day, Tomo has sandy beige commando pants that loosely fit around his lower half while staying tight around his waist. The pants themselves have large main pockets to the side of the hip and three other smaller pockets cascading down each leg, and two back pockets which gives a total of ten pockets.

    A more fitting green wife beater is worn on his upper half to exemplify his physique. An sewn in insignia of Stone is embroider on the right upper half of his shirt. Tomo loves to wear his sunglasses and is almost never caught without them. However, when a fight gets too serious, the sunglasses are taken off and kept in one of his pockets.

    Personality: Tomo has never been the type of person to let things go to his head. He has always been cool and collected in most situations and despite being still young and in his teenage years, he seems to show wisdom far beyond the number that is placed on him. He had always been fascinated with the idea that he was different and because of this he likes to share for people in his hereditary gift. Despite the pain it might cause he has no issue showing off what his body can do and he will always go out of his way to help others.

    When interacting with his peers Tomo is known to be light hearted and fun. Despite the immense pain he must be in, he never really shows it on his face. He is a strong willed individual and he knows that his family name is of great importance to the Village. He feels like he has to be strong for everyone else to be. Because of this he often puts himself in precarious situations.

    When interacting with individuals of higher rank he has the upmost respect and listening to the call of duty to the letter. He is not one to stray far from the path and hopes to one day take on more responsibility and become a well-known shinobi of Stone.

    Within a battle or on a mission, Tomo is concentrated and puts all his efforts into success. He knows his body is unique and can take on more than some others and because of that he considers himself to go head first into a situation, despite the danger.

    Nindo; "Way of the Ninja": Mind as strong as body

    Clan/Bloodline:Jukoto

    Primary Archetype: Ninjutsu Specialist
    Special: When taken as Primary Archetype, the character receives a free Stage One jutsu from a universal Ninjutsu list.
    Primary: Chakra
    Secondary: Own Choice
    Tertiary: Own Choice
    Stat Merit: +2 to Power, +1 to Control
    Stat Flaw: -2 to Strength, -1 to Tactics
    Secondary Archetype: Jukoto Bloodline Specialist
    Special: Adds one point to Power. Not required to be primary.
    Primary: Chakra
    Secondary: Physical
    Tertiary: Mental
    Stat Merit: +1 Strength, +1 Reserves, +1 Power
    Stat Flaw: -1 Intelligence, -1 Tactics, -1 Speed
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    Statistics

    Physical Secondary 27

    Strength: 1+1[JBS]-2[NS]+10[pool]=10+15[FGF]=25
    Speed: 1-1[JBS]+8[pool]=8
    Stamina: 1+9[pool]=10+14[FGF]=24

    Mental Tertiary 24

    Intelligence: 1-1[JBS]+8[pool] + 1[TP] = 9
    Tactics: 1-1[JBS]-1[NS]+9[pool]=8
    Willpower: 1+7[pool]=8

    Chakra Primary 30

    Power: 1+1[JBS]+2[NS]+11 +2[TP] [pool]=17
    Control: 1+1[NS]+10[pool] + 2[TP] =14
    Reserves: 1+1[JBS]+9[pool]=11

    --------------------------------------------------

    Jutsu and Techniques:
    Haganekifu
    Stage 3
    Requirements: Power 11, Control 9, Stamina 8

    Fierce God Fist
    Stage Three: [Jutsu 1-3]
    Stat Requirements: Strength 10, Stamina 10, Willpower 8
    Stage Bonuses: +5 Strength, +4 Stamina
    Special Techniques:[Jutsu 4-5]
    Name: Kishin Ago (Fierce God Jaw)
    Requirement: Strength 8, Stamina 8, Speed 6
    Name: Kishin Sentou (Fierce God Punch)
    Requirements: Willpower 8, Tactics 6, Intelligence 8



    Ninjutsu Global
    Stage 1[Archetype Freebie]
    Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Switch Technique)
    Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 2

    Doton Ninjutsu
    Stage 1[Jutsu 6]
    Doton: Tsuchi Gunjikoudou no Jutsu (Earth Military Movement)
    Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 3

    Stage 2[Jutsu 7]
    Doton: Iwa Bunshin no Jutsu (Stone Clone)
    Requirements: Intelligence 7, Tactics 7, Control 6

    Doton: Rikujou Douyou no Jutsu (Ground Shaking)[Jutsu 8]
    Requirements: Power 7, Control 7, Intelligence 6

    Metal Ninjutsu
    Stage 1[Jutsu 9]
    Metal: Shield
    Requirements: Power 3, Willpower 2

    Stage 2[Jutsu 10]
    Metal: Wire
    Requirements: Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4

    Metal: Shuriken[Jutsu 11]
    Requirements: Power 6, Control 6, Intelligence 4

    Stage 3
    Heavy Metal: Thallium[Jutsu 12]
    Requirements: Power 10, Control 10, Willpower 8


    Inventory:
    Shinobi Kit
    Item Points Remaining:8

    -----------------------------------------

    Biography: Thread Ratings:
    07/24/17 - Lab Control: +2 Power, +1 int[MotM]
    02/04/18 - All Bark, All Bite: 2 Control


    Sengo-Bloody Bones

    Tako Tao

    Aburame Cho

    Sanada Toko

    Kaihoukan Tento

    Len Sosu-Kaze

    Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


    Yen, Sero

    AP

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  • #2
    In your jutsu, you have a list unlabeled.

    "The more I see of what you call civilization,
    the more highly I think of what you call savagery!"

    Robert E. Howard, King Kull
    ||GM, Arechihana Bloodline Clan of Sand||
    ||Co-GM, Shoda Bloodline Clan of Cloud||
    \\Shoda Hoshihana, Cloud Jounin//
    //Arechihana Sasori, Spartoi\\
    ||Yotarou Ouji, SUNA chuunin||Koike Kano, ANBU||
    ||Hasami Kuma, the Iron Devil of Sound||Tsubasa Kinoshita, Rain Jounin||
    Jutsu||Items
    \\Taka//

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    • #3
      good start no doubt....fixed that


      Sengo-Bloody Bones

      Tako Tao

      Aburame Cho

      Sanada Toko

      Kaihoukan Tento

      Len Sosu-Kaze

      Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


      Yen, Sero

      AP

      Swaps

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      • #4
        Okay, a couple general things:

        a) Genin experience completely glossed over. For a character with only three years of life as a full fledged shinobi, that's a lot of time to just get rid of.

        b) Timeline issues!

        If Tomo was 12 when he graduated, then he was 14 at the Exams. If his Exam was ~1 year ago it happened AFTER the Earthquake and may have even been the Engi Time 0.00 Exam in Leaf.

        At any rate, by your own math, there is no feasible way that 'years' passed between receiving the Jewel and now, unless Tomo graduated earlier than normal.

        c) Mentally unstable child is given a Force Jewel essentially because Jukoto. There is nothing to make Tomo seem like a healthy, qualified, skilled candidate besides his family name - which I imagine is precisely why the bio implicates that his father more or less stole the Jewel for him??? This is basically the exact thing I asked you not to do.

        You need to elaborate on what Tomo has done, who he has met, why he would ever be trusted with a Jewel after he had a well-publicized roid rage episode that resulted in a murder that he doesn't even remember.

        Overall, you have been here too long for me to think you don't know better.

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        • #5
          Ok, lets try this again....pretty much a complete overhaul of the dude


          Sengo-Bloody Bones

          Tako Tao

          Aburame Cho

          Sanada Toko

          Kaihoukan Tento

          Len Sosu-Kaze

          Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


          Yen, Sero

          AP

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          • #6
            Now, this, I can get behind. Good work!

            Stone/Clan Approved

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            • #7
              Whose got two thumbs and hasn't been removed from the Elder's group? This loser right here.

              I'm a little rusty but I believe all the stats check out. That's quite a biography too. I'd be a bit wary of name dropping Hyuugas like that but I mean it's 2017 and who cares about those dorks anyway.

              Half Approved.
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              • #8
                Edit: Correct me if I'm wrong but you're 3 jutsu over the cap? 3 Stages of the bloodline + 12 Jutsu?
                Last edited by Masked_One; 06-10-2017, 01:56 PM.



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                • #9
                  I'm pretty sure for the Jukoto you don't have to take every stage of their bloodline list. So really it's 13, Archetype Specialist + 12 = 13. The Jukoto are an odd bloodline.

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                  • #10
                    So you get a bunch of free techs for the price of one list? That's dope.

                    [Half Approved] then



                    Thank you Relu for the buttons!


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                    SHOOT ME A PM OR HIT ME UP ON DISCORD


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                    • #11
                      Yea, bloodline doesnt count


                      Sengo-Bloody Bones

                      Tako Tao

                      Aburame Cho

                      Sanada Toko

                      Kaihoukan Tento

                      Len Sosu-Kaze

                      Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


                      Yen, Sero

                      AP

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                      • #12
                        I like him n_x

                        Adding my Half Approval

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                        • #13
                          Approved. Get outta here!
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