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    [Name]
    Len Sosu
    [Age]
    17
    [Sex]
    Male

    [Height]
    5"2"
    [Country/Village]
    Kaze no kuni/Sunagakure no Sato

    [Rank]
    Chuunin
    [Division]
    KAZE Investigator; KATA Airman
    [Clan]
    N/A


    No one can put me down

    [Physical/Clothing Description]
    Sosu always has a smile, whether it is because he feels confident, is about to lose, or is just talking to someone, or walking down the street you will see a smile on Sosu's face. Always having an erect and strong posture, the young boy walks around like he has a mission. Never lax looking even when relaxing he has a certain demeanor to himself that is projected well. A large x-shaped scar lines his face which you could consider his only lacking but very revealing feature. Never truly healing like it should have it gives Sosu a reminder that there is always someone better out there then him. Though having a large mass of hair Sosu is able to keep it well kept and proper. Never going farther then his eyebrow it is quite a sight to see. He is a lean and well defined young boy and there doesn't seem to be an ounce of fat on him. Constant nights of grueling training have made him this way. His Mark of the Keeper tattoo is that of a swirling typhoon located on his left thigh.

    Just like his composure his garb is also very well kept. The mix of auburn and black make for a hell of a combination. Wrapping around his body tightly his auburn t-shirt hugs against his muscle. No design is visible and seems to be exclusively that color. He enjoys wearing some type of coat that is black to cover up the rest of his body during lax times. However, once a fight begins he will shed his black overcoat to reveal his auburn color t-shirt. The shirt itself ends mid way through his bicep and makes for a great addition to his physique. Sosu prefers black shinobi pants that are lined with numerous pockets to hold tools that he would essentially need. They reach all the way down to his black colored shinobi sandals and they rest comfortably right above his ankles.

    [Personality][Combo Archetype][Statistics]

    Physical Primary 30

    Strength: 1+1{TS}+2{HT}+6{pool}+13{AP} +11[Thread]=34+30{FGF}=64
    Speed: 1+1{TS}-2{HT}+15{pool}+3{AP}+9[Thread]=27+30{VF}=57
    Stamina: 1+1{TS}+1{HT}+9{pool}+16{AP}+10[Thread]=38+27{FGF}=65

    Mental Tertiary 24

    Intelligence: 1+8{pool}+14{AP}=23
    Tactics: 1+8{pool}+14{AP}=23
    Willpower: 1+8{pool}+7[Thread]+7{AP}=23

    Chakra Secondary 27

    Power: 1-1{TS}+7{pool} +5{GMAP} + 6{TP} = 18
    Control: 1-1{HT}+14{pool}+2{AP}+ 2{TP} = 18
    Reserves: 1-2{TS}+6{pool}+11{AP}=17

    [Jutsu & Techniques]
    Vortex Fist
    Stage Six{Jutsu 1-4/AP}
    Speed 27, Strength 23, Stamina 25, Control 18, Power 18
    Stage Bonuses: +4 Strength, +5 Speed
    Special Techniques{Jutsu 5-6}
    Kuuhaku Douryou Atemi [Null Momentum Strike]
    Shunkoku Kyoten Teiryuu [Instant Point Stop]
    Douryou Shousan [Momentum Dispersion]
    Gekizou Heikouidou [Sudden Increase Shift]

    Fierce God Fist
    Stage Six {Jutsu 7-9/AP}
    Stat Requirements: Strength 27, Stamina 25, Speed 23, Willpower 20, Tactics 16
    Stage Bonuses: +5 Strength, +4 Stamina
    Regular Techniques:
    Name: Karada Buki (Body Weapon)
    Special Techniques:{Jutsu 10-11}
    Name: Kishin Ago (Fierce God Jaw)
    Requirement: Strength 8, Stamina 8, Speed 6
    Name: Kishin Sentou (Fierce God Punch)
    Requirements: Willpower 8, Tactics 6, Intelligence 8

    Decaying Fist
    Stage 6:
    Requirement: Stamina 35, Strength 30, Willpower 21, Speed 10, Tactic 15
    Stage Bonus: +5 Strength, +4 Stamina

    Specials:
    Mukuuken (S4)
    A Crown of Thorns (S5)


    Global Ninjutsu
    Stage 1 {AP 3}
    Kawarimi no Jutsu (Body Switch Technique)
    Requirements: Power 2, Tactics 2

    Yoso no Te (Element Hand)
    Requirements: Power 4, Control 4

    Stage 2
    Chakra Kami Nawa (Chakra Hair Rope)
    Requirements: Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4


    Stage 3
    Chakra Tsuitou no Jutsu (Chakra Hunting Technique)
    Requirements: Power 8, Control 8, Reserves 6

    Stage 4
    Shunshin no Jutsu (Instantaneous Body Technique)
    Requirements: Power 12, Control 11, Reserves 10, Intelligence 12

    Tenkuu Hokou no Gyou (The Art of Walking on Air)
    Requirements: Power 15, Control 15, Reserves 13, Intelligence 14

    Kisousei Ninpou Kawara Shuriken (Homing Roof Tile Shuriken Technique)
    Requirements: Intelligence 14, Tactics 13, Willpower 11, Control 10

    Stage 5
    Togeyomi (Underworld Spines)
    Requirements: Intelligence 17, Tactics 16, Willpower 16, Power 15

    Takai Yoso no Te (Higher Element Hand)
    Requirements: Power 18, Control 17, Reserves 17, Tactics 14, Yoso no Te

    Chidori (Thousand Birds)
    Requirements: Intelligence 18, Tactics 17, Willpower 17, Control 14

    Stage 6
    Kage Bunshin no Jutsu (Shadow Clone Technique)
    Requirements: Power 21, Control 20, Reserves 19, Intelligence 17, Tactics 15

    Shogiyomi (Underworld Spears)
    Requirements: Intelligence 23, Tactics 23, Willpower 22, Control 16, Reserves 15, Togeyomi

    Kyokugi-Ken (Sword of Acrobatic Feats)
    Stage 5
    Requirements: Strength: 19 Speed: 19 Stamina: 18 Willpower 16
    Stat Bonus: +3 Strength, +3 Speed, +3 Stamina
    Regular Technique:
    Javelin Thrust
    Over And Under
    Spin Fury
    Top Spin
    Shockwave

    Sand Ninutsu
    Stage 1
    Name: Suna Bunshin (Sand Clone){AP 7}
    Requirements: Power 2, Willpower 2

    Stage 2
    Name: Suna Same (Sand Shark)
    Requirements: Intelligence 6, Willpower 5, Control 5

    Stage 3
    Name: Suna Shigure (Sand Shower)
    Requirements: Intelligence 8, Willpower 6, Tactics 8

    Stage 4
    Name: Sunagakure (Hidden Sand)
    Requirements: Power 12, Control 11, Reserves 10, Intelligence 12

    Stage 5
    Name: Suna Ryuu (Sand Dragon)
    Requirements: Power 17, Control 16, Reserves 16, Intelligence 15

    Name: Gakidou Sabaku (Hungry Desert)
    Requirements: Intelligence 17, Willpower 16, Tactics 16, Power 15

    Name: Chiisai Bunshin Yamada (Small Clone Projectiles)
    Requirements: Power 18, Control 17, Reserves 17, Willpower 14

    Stage 6
    Name: Kiseiseibutsu Suna (Parasite Sand)
    Requirements: Intelligence 23, Willpower 23, Tactics 22, Control 16, Reserves 15

    Universal Dog Summoning Contract
    (AP) Stage 1 - Kuchiyose no Taro
    Requirements: Strength 3, Reserves 2
    (AP) Stage 2- Kuchiyose no Jiro
    Requirements: Strength 6, Speed 6, Power 4
    (AP) Stage 3 - Kuchiyose no Momo
    Requirements: Strength 9, Speed 9, Power 7
    (AP) Stage 4 - Kuchiyose no Kiku
    Requirements: Strength 14, Speed 13, Stamina 11, Control 10
    (AP) Stage 5 - Kuchiyose no Daiki
    Requirements: Strength 18, Speed 17, Stamina 17, Control 14

    Paths of the Shrine Maiden (Miko Powers) -- Pierce!

    Hikari no Hahen - Shards of Light
    Requirements: 2 Control, 2 Intelligence

    Stage 2
    Hoshishinsei - Starburst
    Requirements: 5 Willpower, 4 Intelligence, 4 Tactics
    Condition: None

    Stage 3
    Hikari no Sokudo - Speed of Light
    Requirements: 8 Willpower, 6 Intelligence, 8 Tactics
    Condition: None

    Stage 4
    Hikari no Heiki - Armament of Light
    Requirements: 12 Willpower, 11 Intelligence, 10 Tactics, 12 Control
    Condition: Attacking an evil target

    Stage 5
    Buki wo Shiiru - Sealing Weapon
    Requirements: 17 Willpower, 16 Intelligence, 16 Tactics, 15 Control
    Condition: Attacking a supernatural evil target

    Stage 6
    Kouka no Tamashii - Hardened Soul
    Requirements: 21 Willpower, 20 Intelligence, 19 Tactics, 17 Control, 15 Power
    Condition:

    [Inventory]
    Shinobi Kit
    Katana [3]
    *Returning [2]

    Initial Weapon Points: 8
    Weapon Points Purchased: 0
    Weapon Points Used: 5
    Remaining Weapon Points: 4

    [Biography]
    Originally Posted by Bureaucracy of Kaze no Kuni

    Can you please state your name for the record?

    Sure Sosu, Len Sosu if you want to get technical.

    From what I am reading from your reports, you are very obedient to directions. Is this true?

    Yes Sir, I love to fall in line and I am always there for my superior officers in the dace of danger. I am here for Sunagakure and the Lord Kazekage always.

    Good, good, so tell me a little about your self Sosu-chan.

    Well sir, I was born in Gion Village not more than sixteen years ago to a loving mother and father that dedicated their lives to the same life I am living now.

    Yes, your father is quite the shinobi; it is tragic what had happened to him indeed.

    Yes, it really is but that is alright. I am okay with it now and I accept the fact that he lost his life for the cause of the Village. I just wish that the Sasori Ryodan were extinguished before our loyal comrades had to go into those tunnels.

    Well, do you feel any type of disgust for the Sasori Ryodan or the Suna no Soushoku?

    I hate them both for what they have done. The Sasori Ryodan might have helped Sunagkaure in the past but they were traitors and deserved the fate they received. Secondly, the Suna no Soushoku desere no mercy and I am glad I was there when their apostle was defeated in the middle of the Village by Lord Kazekage Enzan. I just wish my father got the recognition that Renchinshin was getting. Sometime I really hate those individuals with their birthright.

    Birthright? You mean individuals born from a clan?

    Yes, I hate some of those guys so much! They walk around like they own the place and that they are the best thing since the creation of Sunagkaure. Well, I got a bone or two to pick with them and I will win!

    I sense a lot of hatred towards those brothers that were given something they were never asked for.

    Neither was my father! My father was a great man and despite his skill he still felt short to Renchinshin Hitoko. I grew up thinking no one was stronger than my father and as I grew up I noticed Hitoko-san. His prowess is something I have never seen before but I want to be like him.

    You know it was the whole village that defeated Minoru, not just Hitoko and not just Lord Juuidaime Kaszekage Enzan.

    I guess you are right. I guess I went a little overboard on such a thing. Still; out of this new class of chuunnin I want to rise to the top!

    Well, tell me Sosu-chan, what makes you feel like you even deserve the induction into something that only a few amount of people know about? Why do you stand out among the rest?

    I dont lack a single thing and I will prove it. I know how battle works, I know how to sneak undetected and I know respect. I love this Village and its people and I know I can help more so then I am being allowed!

    But, the life of a shinobi is not always fair, you should realize that the most. So tell me, who did you vote for in the Kazekage vote last year?

    Of course I voted for Lord Enzan. I like his drive and he has amazing skill that would out surpass everyone and he has no birthright as well.

    So, just because he was cool you voted for him?



    So, you are the investigative kind of guy?

    Well, I mean, I like to unravel mysterious but I also love to punch it down in the face if it need be.

    So you say you hate everyone with a birthright, how do you feel about the Mujina and their recent unfortunate event?

    Well, I may hate, but I would never condone the death of innocence. That is where I would draw the line. No man, woman, or child deserves an execution and the Sasori Ryodan are awful individuals from a time long past that deserve nothing but being destroyed.

    Good, I am glad you are at least not as blood thirsty as you make yourself out to be. You know, we are all brothers in this fight against the desert and we need all the help we can get.

    I understand, but have you never hated a sibling at least a little; maybe a cousin you were jealous of them or something like that?

    Of course, jealousy makes you stronger, maybe you are confusing jealousy for hate.

    I will never be jealous of anyone. I will work my ass off to be the best and it will happen.

    Where were you when the Jailbreak happened a few months ago?

    I was out on the front lines trying to obtain anyone I could from the prison that had escaped. I remember very vividly how a specific hazardous fight went. I was there face to face with a mountain of a man. He seemed to have more power within his own pinky then I had in my whole body but he was slow. Slow enough that I was able to punch and chip him down. I not only used my speed but I used my smarts to crumble that man.

    So how many individuals were you able to apprehend?



    Tell me about those two.

    Well the one with the sword was easy enough to take down since I had trained my hands to disarm a blade from any man. Once I had his weapon halfway across to street he held no chance to me. The third woman was a little more difficult. To be honest I was almost defeated while being buried in a sand hole she created. However, once I picked up momentum I was able to blast through a sand dragon she had created and with a stunned look on her face I broke her jaw. She must have flew nearly ten feet before slamming her head on a wall.

    So you really think your fists can do enough?

    Yes, some people are able to raise large dunes of sand, others able to create glass constructs but I will punch and shatter everything that comes against me. That is what I want for myself.

    Tell me about your genin years; how were they?

    They were fine, I was a part of a very strong team and despite the fact I had a Mujina and a Kabane I still pulled my weight.

    Would you say they took most of the fame from you?

    Yes, they took a lot of it and I was definitely an underdog during my times with them but I still did as much and accomplished as much as them.

    Did you attend your Mujina teammates wake?

    Yes, I was there. It was sad like I said but like I stated earlier I never condone unneeded death.

    Please tell me about your Chuunin Exam.



    What did your Chuunin Exams consist of?

    The first exam was a fairly simple one that involved creating a plan to steal a scroll from a highly secure office space. The second Exam was the use of teamwork in a setting outside in the elements. Each team was given a target to hunt. If they hunted the correct target and won they moved on. Finally, the last exam was about combat.

    You three made it that far?

    No, we did not. It was because of our lack of teamwork that we fell short to some of the other teams. It really upset me at that moment and I hated everything about my teammates. Of course it died down as the days passed after the exams but for the time I was very upset. I was in a real bad place and I wanted to do anything to fix it.

    What do you mean a bad place?



    I see there are many missions you had gone on. Some to the Fringe, some to attack the Suna no Soushoku and I see here you were a part of the raid that actually defeated the Priests for good. I must say that for your age, that is impressive. However, tell me about your deadliest mission?

    I was with two other Chuunin and a Jounin leader. At this point I had grown physically strong enough to stand with either of those other Chuunin. We were to be sent to the Hazy Mountains where there had been reports of missing village folk. We were only meant to scout but as we stayed we grew aware of another presence.

    You fought one of the priests?

    Yes, only that Jounin and I lived as well. The first of the Chuunin was easily dispensed of as a flurry of projectiles launched onto our campfire. With a moment this skinny but overwhelming man began to show himself within the fires light. There was not much to the fight but I knew that we were in for a fight. The other Chuunin acted as support as me and the Jounin began to spar with the priest. His cane moved like a snake and it wrapped around our Jounin leader. Luckily, I was able to land a hit that allowed his grip to weaken but it had already broken a few ribs. Then without a sense of any awareness the ground ate the supporting Chuunin. There I was alone with a broken Jounin and a very calm priest. I tried and I tried but I began to be cut down farther and farther.

    So how did you get out of such a thing?

    The Jounin I was with was able to overcome his injuries and as my body was being used as a punching bag he was side swiped by a sword slash from the side. I took that opportunity to reach into that wound and grab anything I could and rip it out.

    That is brutal. I kind of like that. However, what can you do for this new coming of Sunagakure?

    I have seen what hides under the sands, I have seen death, I have seen despair. I have seen what I can do and it scares me but it should scare our enemies more. I have gone on countless suicide missions to the deepest and darkest parts of the fringe. Conquered monstrous snakes within the sands and even helped kill a Priest that threatened the well-being of our home. If there is anyone that deserves to become one of these ranks it is me.

    We shall see how long you survive
    Other Info:
    Taijutsu savant breaker
    AP Breaker

    Missions
    02/19/16 - Growing Pains:Vortex Fist +1 Stamina, +1AP Kuuhaku Douryou Atemi [Null Momentum Strike]
    03/22/17 - Rising Sun +2 Speed
    03/23/17 - 16 AP Used: +1 Speed, +5 Strength, +4 Stamina, +2 Control, Stage 5 Vortex Fist, Chakra Hair Rope, Sand Shark, Sand Shower
    05/27/17 - Where There Is A Will There Is A Way +1 Willpower, AP: Gekizou Heikouidou
    06/10/17 - Colossus in the Shade +2 Willpower, +1 Speed[MotM]
    06/13/17 - Every Dog has his Day +1 Strength, +1 Speed[MotM]
    06/13/17 - AP Usage: 5 AP Used for Stages 1-5 of the Dog Contract
    06/30/17 - Gate Edits: 3 gates removed, three stages of Sword of Acrobatic Feats added.
    07/16/17 - Lullabies of Death + 2 Willpower
    07/16/17 - AP Expenditure 2 Spent - S4 Kyokugi-Ken, S4 Sa Kishin Kobushi
    07/23/17 - Moonlight Moontone +2 Strength, +1 Speed [MotM]
    07/23/17 - Twilight Assassins +2 Willpower, +1 Speed [MotM]
    07/30/17 - Man v. Herself +2 Stamina, Decaying Fist Stage 4 [MotM]
    08/10/17 - The Rising Sun (Pt. 2) +2 Strength, +1MotM Stage 5 Fierce God Fist, Stage 5 Sword of Acrobatic Feats
    08/31/17 - Sand Mirage +2 Stamina
    08/31/17 - Confronting the Furious Five: Now Four +2 Stamina
    04/11/19 - Confronting the Frivilous Three +2 Speed
    05/14/18 - [Calamity] Meeting the High Oracles - Participation GMAP: +2 Power
    05/14/18 - Baddies Being Bad +1 Strength, +1 Speed
    06/04/18 - Acquisition Attention +2 Control
    06/05/18 - [Valley] Calamity Begins +2 Power
    06/05/18 - [Calamity] Climb thread completion GMAP +1 Power
    02/18/19 - AP Spending 2AP Strength, GMAP Stage 5 Decaying Fist, 2AP Mukuuken and Crown of Thorns
    02/14/19 - The Old Man of the Desert: +1 Strength
    03/05/19 - Once and For All: +2 Power
    03/11/19 - Engiversary AP Spending: 25AP - Stats [+10 Stamina, +6 Tactics, +5 Willpower, +4 Strength] 3AP - Jutsu [Vortex Fist VI, Fierce God Fist VI, Decaying Fist VI] & 2 GMAP [+2 Power] & 2 TP [+2 Power]
    03/15/19 - 50 AP: +Jutsu: Element Hand, Chakra Hunting Technique, Instantaneous Body Technique, The Art of Walking on Air, Homing Roof Tile Shuriken Technique, Underworld Spines, Higher Element Hand, Chidori, Kage Bunshin, Underworld Spears, Hidden Sand, Sand Dragon, Hungry Desert, Small Clone Projectiles, Parasite Sand (15 AP)
    +Stats: +14 Intelligence, +8 Tactics, +2 Willpower, +11 Reserves (35AP)
    03/16/19 - [Calamity] Black Forest Retreat: +1 Strength, +1 TP Banked
    03/22/19 - [Solo] Tower of Heaven: +1 Stamina, Banked TP Spent: Hikari no Hahen (8th List)
    03/24/19 - Wisdom of the Amazons: +1
    Stamina, Hoshishinsei (Miko, S2)
    04/30/19 - [Solo] The Nameless: +1 Stamina
    07/10/19 - Black Forest Resort: +2 Strength, +1 Thread Booster
    02/18/20 - 4 AP Expenditure: Speed of Light, Armament of Light, Sealing Weapon, Hardened Soul


    Sengo-Bloody Bones

    Tako Tao

    Aburame Cho

    Sanada Toko

    Kaihoukan Tento

    Len Sosu-Kaze

    Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


    Yen, Sero

    AP

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  • #2
    Unless this is an AP breaker, no more than 3 AP may be spent on jutsu.
    Rain GM


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    • #3
      fixed that up for you. Thought it was different; sorry


      Sengo-Bloody Bones

      Tako Tao

      Aburame Cho

      Sanada Toko

      Kaihoukan Tento

      Len Sosu-Kaze

      Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


      Yen, Sero

      AP

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      • #4
        Physical primary only has 1 points per stage for the first 2 lists. Decaying Fist costs 2 points per stage, so you don't have enough jutsu to take it.

        I'll leave it to our glorious Sand GM overlord to determine if the bio is good enough, my only issue with it would be him killing 3 priests since if my memory serves me right the priests were jounin level or above and your character is apparently a genin for most of the bio.
        (Rain Chuunin) Oichi Josuke | (Sand Chuunin) Sawamatsu no Motonubu | (Leaf Chuunin) Hyuuga Kannon
        (Retired Grass Chuunin) Shinshi Gemmei | (Snow Genin) Gonnohyoe | (Mist Genin) Kurusu Ringo
        (Brigade of Light) Chosokabe Muneshige | (Leaf Chuunin) Hong Feiyan
        Shichou Clan GM - Shichou Mission Thread Here!
        Brigade of Light GM - Missions and More!
        I will do any thread, anywhere, anytime. Just PM me!
        Wizlab | Swaps | (AP) | RIP

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        • #5
          So this guy will be taking the Tai savant special that I bought so it means I only spend 1 point no matter what on taijutsu stages. {Highlighted that in Other Information}

          Your right Junge, you were around during when all these threads were happening so I trust your memory. I took out the part where I beat up three Jounin myself and replaced it with a chuunin exam segment. Left mostly everything else the same.

          Interviews got me stressing :P


          Sengo-Bloody Bones

          Tako Tao

          Aburame Cho

          Sanada Toko

          Kaihoukan Tento

          Len Sosu-Kaze

          Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


          Yen, Sero

          AP

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          • #6
            Oh, how did I miss that? Silly donation awards making all these character sheets so hard to check.

            My only remaining comment is I'm not sure how character created Yagyou work. Normal Yagyou have a nickname and an alternate ego but I'm unsure if Hitoko wants you to RP that happening or if it's supposed to be in the biography somewhere. Again that's mostly a Hitoko question so you might want to contact him and see what he wants in that regard. Half Approved.
            (Rain Chuunin) Oichi Josuke | (Sand Chuunin) Sawamatsu no Motonubu | (Leaf Chuunin) Hyuuga Kannon
            (Retired Grass Chuunin) Shinshi Gemmei | (Snow Genin) Gonnohyoe | (Mist Genin) Kurusu Ringo
            (Brigade of Light) Chosokabe Muneshige | (Leaf Chuunin) Hong Feiyan
            Shichou Clan GM - Shichou Mission Thread Here!
            Brigade of Light GM - Missions and More!
            I will do any thread, anywhere, anytime. Just PM me!
            Wizlab | Swaps | (AP) | RIP

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            • #7
              Add your nickname/alter ego to the character sheet. It wouldn't be a Yagyou character without it.

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              • #8
                alright, I think I did what you asked for. If anything just tell me to add more things.


                Sengo-Bloody Bones

                Tako Tao

                Aburame Cho

                Sanada Toko

                Kaihoukan Tento

                Len Sosu-Kaze

                Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


                Yen, Sero

                AP

                Swaps

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                • #9
                  I honestly don't see a reason why this guy was promoted to Chuunin much less selected for Yagyou. Can you please give me more reasons for both of those.
                  Rain GM


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                  • #10
                    added more to the Jailbreak, more to the chuunin exams, more to a couple missions that he had gone on. I also added just a little more fluff to the bio. I am just not sure what else I can add except adding more fluff missions. Also added a run in with a priest


                    Sengo-Bloody Bones

                    Tako Tao

                    Aburame Cho

                    Sanada Toko

                    Kaihoukan Tento

                    Len Sosu-Kaze

                    Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


                    Yen, Sero

                    AP

                    Swaps

                    Comment


                    • #11
                      My couple of issues.

                      You should read over the bio more closely. There are a few spelling issues, lack of apostrophes, birthrite should be birthright; I think there was a misplaced quotation mark somewhere in there. Some of the sentence structures are a bit odd. And then there is the capitalizing of positions. Chuunin doesn't seem to ever be capitalized but Jounin does. I've never really known which was correct (capitalizing them or not) but I'm not going to point everything out for you. Just go back over the bio a bit and correct those mistakes.

                      I'm a wee bit hesitant on the Chuunin Exams part, since you make it seem like he got pretty far but I understand newer characters need a place to "start" and couldn't have been included. So, I guess it is fair game so long as it doesn't go against the official Engi canon of who was promoted. You make up for the rest of it in missions and stuff, so that's fine.

                      Personally, I'm fine with Halfing this for a Chuunin. The Yagyou part, I'm a bit iffy on but I'll leave that up to Hito.

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                      • #12
                        Made some adjustments to my dudes bio; I don't know what else to add that would prove he was worth being a chuunin; went to chuunin exams and failed but completed missions successfully in the fringe, hazy mountain, took down three low level prisoners by himself and was a helping hand to killing a priest in the raids. If you don't feel he is worthy of Yagyou that is fine; I'll take him as a regular chuunin. I just wanna start rping in sand


                        Sengo-Bloody Bones

                        Tako Tao

                        Aburame Cho

                        Sanada Toko

                        Kaihoukan Tento

                        Len Sosu-Kaze

                        Jukoto "Stone Fist" Tomo


                        Yen, Sero

                        AP

                        Swaps

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                        • #13
                          Aight fam, thanks for your patience.

                          After chatting with the Secondary, I've decided that this character might be better off as a regular Chuunin until you build your rep with him. So, remove all Yagyou related stuff about him, and you got yourself a Sand GM Approval on this.

                          Sorry for the wait. Wanted to review all Sand Applications at once.

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                          • #14
                            So I took out all the Yagyou stuff. However, I added the Celestial gates, an AP Breaker, a stage one in sand ninjutsu and 2 special techniques in the fierce god fist. Taijutsu. I think all of the stats work out. So I think with that sand gm approval this could be moved out of registration correct?
                            Last edited by Cayuga; 02-13-2016, 07:18 AM.


                            Sengo-Bloody Bones

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                            Aburame Cho

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                            • #15
                              Nah you need 3 approvals in total, you only got 2. Well, 1 now considering the re-approvals needed because of the jutsu change. I think the stats still check out tho. My approval still stands tho.

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