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  • Kiyomizu Shusui - MOED Hunter-nin

    Name: Kiyomizu Shusui
    Age: Twenty-one
    Sex: Male
    Height: Character Type: Shinobi

    Country/Village: Kusa no Kuni / Kusagakure no Sato
    Rank: Chuunin
    Division: Hunter-nin (MOED)

    Physical Description and Clothing: Oh, what a difference a few years has made. What replaced a rather lethargic and oft called "skittish" young boy is the bud of a more focused and mature young man. Shusui's body has taken on more of the natural weight that comes with growing healthily to the prime of his life. He is still standing comfortably at a rather standard height of a Kusagakure shinobi and looks equally as sturdy while he continues to grow into the new and more physically demanding role of a Hidden Grass Hunter. The male's more boyish facial features have now also gone the more handsome route, though between members of the Kiyomizu family, he has still predominantly kept more of his mother's features. His hair, previously long is now cut short to frame his face and give him a smarter looking appearance and a thin dusting of facial scruff lines his jaw. The male walks comfortably through the streets of Kusagakure, confidence coming from many of the experiences he has undergone in his young, but still budding career.

    Still... though the numbers of articles have increased in numbers, Shusui still keeps them for the most part very simple. Not a flashy person by any means, the male likes to keep his wardrobe pretty neutral. There is still more of a lean towards the various shades and hues of green --- his favorite color since his younger days, but otherwise most of his casual clothing falls upon this line. It certainly doesn't hurt that neutral colors are a staple of Kusagakure no Sato's color scheme and surroundings in the least. His choice of the type of clothing that he prefers wearing has changed a fair bit, though. Now, the Chuunin prefers smart-looking, longer sleeved clothing in a more formal settings such as work.

    Personality: With everything that has happened over the last few years, Shusui has changed in many ways. New responsibilities, privledges and expectations have increased his sense of urgency, keeping him much more busy than he had been in the past. Tagging along with this new sense of urgency has come more of an appreciative sense of privacy. Though known for being more contemplative in the past, the added experience from his career has further instilled the "look before you leap" mentality, which colors into all phases of his life. This mindset has closed his applicable social circle by a bit--- he is not the type to go out and party or do some of the things the more "youthful" members are expected to do, but he is very appreciative and protective of those close friends that he has made over the years. Strangers also get a lot of consideration, even if he is not nearly as open. Above all, Shusui believes in harmony.

    Even with the all of the new responsibilities that have come into his life of late, Shusui is still as inquisitive as he was when he was a teenager. Surprisingly, there are many opportunities that come up for studying in this field. Watching his coworkers interact, seeing reactions to a chase, finding texts and scrolls to study in order to improve... the Chuunin has many new ways to find enjoyment in the smaller things that he appreciates. Luckily, his more manipulative side has gone off to the way. More content to examine and let things go their natural course rather than to redirect, Shusui has found an overall more enjoyable time of things. There are still a fair amount of uncertainties in his life and the direction that it will bring him, but in seeing how his beliefs and disposition has gotten him so far, the Chuunin is more confident in staying the course and seeing what lies ahead.

    Nindo; "Way of the Ninja":Clan/Bloodline: None.
    Primary Archetype: Maverick (+1 Intelligence, +1 Tactics, +1 Willpower, -1 Power, -1 Control, -1 Reserves)
    Secondary Archetype: Quicksilver (+2 Speed, +1 Stamina, -1 Strength, -1 Power, -1 Control)

    Statistics:

    Physical Strength: 1 - 1 + 4 (TH) + 3 (AP) + 7 = 14
    Speed: 1 + 2 + 10 + 2 (AP) + 2 (TH) = 15 (+16 Ahou no Ojike) 33
    Stamina: 1 + 1 + 10 + 1 (TH) = 13 (+20 Ahou no Ojike) 33

    MentalIntelligence: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 2 (TH) = 17
    Tactics: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 1 (TH) = 16
    Willpower: 1 + 1 + 10 + 3 (AP) + 1 (TH) = 16

    Chakra Power: 1 - 1 - 1 + 4 (TH) + 9 + 3 (AP) = 15
    Control: 1 - 1 - 1 + 2 (TH) + 8 = 9
    Reserves: 1 - 1 + 1 (TH) + 7 = 8

    Levels:

    Strength: Level Two
    Speed: Level Five
    Stamina: Level Five

    Jutsus and Techniques

    Global Ninjutsu
    [F-1] Kawarimi no Jutsu (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
    [F-2] Henge no Jutsu (Control 3, Intelligence 2) [Stage One]
    [F-3] Kinobori/Kabenobori no Jutsu (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4) [Stage Two]
    [TP] Fukuwajutsu (Intelligence 9, Tactics 9, Control 7) [Stage Three]
    [TP] Kafunkyuuka Shibuku (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]
    [TP] Eki Haitori no Jutsu (Intelligence 17, Tactics 16, Willpower 16, Power 15) [Stage Five]

    Ahou no OjikeMirage of Foresight
    [TP] Stage Four (15 Speed, 14 Stamina, 14 Strength, 14 Tactics)
    - Regular Techniques: Vital Strike: Shiban, Battle Analysis: I Choose You!, Pressure Point: Mukankaku
    |Cumulative Bonuses: +16 Speed, +20 Stamina|

    Kusagakure Ninjutsu
    [F-7] Etai Souken (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
    [GMAP] Kusa Bunshin (Control 3, Intelligence 2) [Stage One]
    [F-8] Hinsei no Senrigan (Intelligence 6, Tactics 5, Control 5) [Stage Two]
    [AP] Gosunkugi Kusa Tama (Intelligence 5, Tactics 4, Willpower 4) [Stage Two]
    [TP] Kusa Kusariei (Intellegence 8, Willpower 8, Tactics 6) [Stage Three]
    [TP] Tsukene Yari (Power 8, Control 8, Reserves 6) [Stage Three]
    [AP] Kusa Hayashi Hara (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]
    [TP] Kusa Mikon (Intelligence 17, Tactics 16, Willpower 16, Power 15) [Stage Five]

    Kusagakure Genjutsu
    [GMAP] Tanpopo Kaze (Power 2, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
    [F-9] Hana no Jutsu (Control 3, Intellegence 2) [Stage One]
    [F-10] Ki Bunshin no Jutsu (Power 4, Control 4) [Stage One]
    [F-11] Etai Teichi no Jutsu (Power 5, Control 4, Reserves 4) [Stage Two]
    [F-12] Genjutsu Kai (Willpower 8, Tactics 8, Intellegence 6) [Stage Three]
    [AP] Kamigami Riki no Jutsu (Intelligence 12, Tactics 11, Willpower 10, Power 12) [Stage Four]

    Kusagakure no Kuchiyose: Neko
    [AP] Kuchiyose no Hyougomii (Strength 3, Tactics 2) [Stage One]
    [TP] Kuchiyose no Hyouyuu (Strength 6, Speed 6, Willpower 4) [Stage Two]
    [TP] Kuchiyose no Hyoubuke (Strength 9, Speed 9, Willpower 7) [Stage Three]
    [TP] Kuchiyose no Hyoukuro (Strength 14, Speed 13, Stamina 11, Intelligence 10) [Stage Four]

    Inventory:
    Name: Shinobi Kit
    Cost: 0
    -----

    Total: 0
    Weapon Points Remaining: 8
    Additional Weapon Points Gained: 0

    Biography: Other Info: - Shusui likes to cook.
    - He loves to read.
    - Favorite color is Green.
    - Astute in multi-tasking.
    - Has an ability to intake information, without having to actively listen to it.
    - Has an extremely mischievous streak.
    - Likes to flirt.
    - Born May 22nd.

    Thread Log:
    - GMAP 04/28/08: Kusa Bunshin
    - Basic Patrol? How Boring 04/29/08: +1 Control, +1 Reserves, Kusa Kusariei
    - Breakout: Old Dogs and Old Tricks 06/01/08: +1 Strength, Mirage of Foresight
    - GMAP 06/11/08: Tanpopo Kaze
    - Just In Case 07/13/08: +1 Power, Tsukene Yari
    - Revision of Relations 10/10/08: +1 Power, Fukuwajutsu
    - 2 AP 12/14/08: +2 Power
    - 3 AP 03/19/09: Kuchiyose no Hyougomii, Kamigami Riki no Jutsu, Gosunkugi Kusa Tama
    - 10 AP 03/26/09: +3 Intelligence, Tactics, Willpower and Kusa Hayashi Hara
    - Old Rival 05/03/09: Ineligible for rating (Two threads at once.)
    - Stop that Mask 06/03/09: +2 Strength and Kusa no Kuchiyose: Hyouyuu
    - On the lam 06/20/09: +1 Strength, Kafunkyuuka Shibuku
    - Of Constancy and Change 10/24/09: +2 Intelligence, Kuchiyose no Hyoubuke
    - Old Attire, New Decor 08/18/10: +2 Power, +1 Tactics
    - Strongarm Tactics 09/16/10: +1 Power (AP), +1 Willpower, Eki Haitori no Jutsu
    - Foreign Drank 05/30/11: +1 Strength, Kusa Mikon

    - Addition 05/20/12: +1 Speed (AP), +2 Strength (AP)
    - The Butcher's House - Part One 05/24/12: +1 Stamina, Kuchiyose no Hyoukuro
    - What's up Doc? 01/21/13: +1 Control, Ahou no Ojike Stage Four
    - Wrong Number 07/10/15: +2 Speed
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    [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
    [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
    Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
    Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

  • #2
    Genjutsu Specialist
    Special: When taken as Primary Archetype, the character recieves an extra 1 post added to base duration to one genjutsu technique. This may be used only once a thread.
    Primary: Mental
    Secondary: Chakra
    Tertiary: Physical

    Stat blocks are incorrect. You can't take Physical as Secondary.

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    • #3
      That mix-up has now been corrected and edited.
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      [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
      [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
      Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
      Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

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      • #4
        Can you please just list the names of your regular techs instead of pasting their ENTIRE description?
        Time flies like an arrow. Fruit flies like honey.

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        • #5
          To JauntyHat: I just went in a fixed it, though that was how I was used to putting stuff in my taijutsu section. o_o; Sorry.
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          [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
          [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
          Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
          Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

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          • #6
            Strength: 1 +7(Base) -1(QS) = 9
            Should be 7.

            The second paragraph of your biography reads like it would fit better in personality.In general, the bio's a bit bland.

            DTR
            (Down ta roleplay, yo.)
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            • #7
              I fixed that other stat error and for the biography, I thought it was just a bit lacking. Do you figure I should elaborate on it more or is it not that big of a deal?
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              [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
              [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
              Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
              Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

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              • #8
                If you're able to come up with a way to improve the story, then there's no harm in doing so. In fact, it'll probably help.

                DTR
                (Down ta roleplay, yo.)
                Nuke-nin
                Kid/Dog
                Golem Girl
                My Swaps

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                • #9
                  Indeed, Aces is correct that the aim here should be to write a biography in the biography section. Right now you have more personality and then the last paragraph is a biography.

                  You need to flesh out the man's history, give him some events to remember and live by. Read other profiles for examples.

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                  • #10
                    Alright! Overhauled the last bio and threw in another, much longer biography. Added in a bit more to the personality part as well.
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                    [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
                    [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
                    Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
                    Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

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                    • #11
                      eather
                      either

                      breezing past that Gennin graduation
                      genin

                      I still aren't sure that
                      I'm still not sure?


                      Fix that stuff and I'll Double GM Approve this. But all and all, while there is nothing really wrong with this, guys really laid back for a shinobi. Oh wells.

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                      • #12
                        >_>;

                        Edited all that out. "I'm still aren't sure." I felt like I seriously failed right there, looking at that mistake.
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                        [Kirigakure] Imai Hayate [Kusagakure] Kiyomizu Shusui
                        [Kumogakure] Matsuoka Imae [Konohagakure] Ohayashi Toshiko
                        Current Owner of: [Legendary] The Peregrine: Shimizu Miho
                        Items, Hijutsu, Roleplay

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                        • #13
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                          • #14
                            Half'd and ready to be moved.

                            AP: 39

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