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  • [Cloud Chuunin] Shoda Kagero

    Voice Actor: James McAvoy

    SHODA KAGERO
    Lock up your wives and lock up your lovers,
    Lest they join Kagero under the covers.




    Age: 20
    Sex: Male
    Height: 5 feet, 11 inches
    Country/Village: Rai no Kuni/Kumogakure
    Character Type: Shinobi
    Rank: Chuunin

    Clan/Bloodline: Shoda Clan
    Lightning Body Colour: Gold

    [Nindo; "Way of the Ninja"]

    "One for all."

    [Appearance]
    [Personality]

    Kagero knows that when he puts his mind to something, he can achieve it. He is a resourceful free thinker, but one who plays by the rulesrein in his ego when he must, and compartmentalise to limit the extent that his professional life might encroach on the personal. Fighting for the freedoms of clan and country includes his own rights too.

    A natural student in the art of espionage, cut from the same cloth as the rest of his tribe, he has cultivated an extraordinary level of concentration, as well as a thirst for learning and professional development. His sterling commitment to the LMG continues to turn heads, most notably among those who would otherwise look down on the Fallen Kings and Queens as traitors. As a member of the Shoda clan, he has always walked a path between the paradigms of treason and integrity whilst weathering the warring winds of contrived duty. The way has never been clear and the everstorm has left its mark. The Three Faction War was especially cruel but, as a survivor, Kagero endured its bloody conclusion.

    It is not just optimism driving him forward, but responsibility. He hides the scars of his teenage years well. Loss has failed to crush his resolve; his memories demand that he persevere as the poster boy for resilience, recovery and living a full and passionate life. The attention Kagero receives from his male and female counterparts is the product of being a genuinely nice guy, not to mention one who never mistreats his dates. After all, good looks and charm only get a man so far. But with high standardsheartbreaker.

    This veil of dapper gentility hides an inquisitive brain-box who can recite entire film scripts, owns extensive manga collections, is beguiled by avant-garde technologies, longs to master his element, and who defies expectations but all on his own time. He also dances. Well, he dabbles. Ballroom, if you must know.

    [Statistics]

    Lightning Specialist x Fallen King
    Elemental Special: Gains a free low-level Lightning technique.
    *Stat Merit: +2 to Power, +2 to Reserves, +1 to Strength
    *Stat Flaw: -2 to Willpower, -2 to Tactics, -1 to Speed
    (AC - Advanced Character)

    Chakra - Primary
    Power: 1 + 2* + 10 (+1 AC) = 14
    Control: 1 + 11 (+3 AC) = 15
    Reserves: 1 + 2* + 9 (+2 AC) = 14

    Physical - Secondary
    Strength: 1 + 1* + 8 = 10
    Speed: 1 - 1* + 11 (+3 AP) = 14 [+12 Jishaku Genkotsu] = 26
    Stamina: 1 + 8 = 9

    Mental - Tertiary
    Intelligence: 1 + 4 (+5 AP) = 10
    Tactics: 1 - 2* + 10 (+4 AP) = 13
    Willpower: 1 - 2* + 10 (+3 AP) = 12

    [Jutsu & Techniques]

    Lightning Release (Raiton)

    Stage 1: Flickering Luminous Body (Yurayura Hikari Karada) [PWR 2, TAC 2, FREE]
    Stage 1: Electric Shock Clone (Dengeki Bushin) [WIL 3, RES 3]
    Stage 2: Deafen (Rousuru) [PWR 5, CTR 4, RES 4]
    Stage 2: Lightning Bolt (Rakurai) [WIL 6, TAC 5, CTR 5]
    Stage 3: Detonation (Bakuhatsu) [PWR 9, CTR 9, WIL 7]
    Stage 3: Great Pulse (Idaina Myakudo) [WIL 9, TAC 9, CTR 7]
    Stage 4: Lightning Instantaneous (Raikou Shunshin) [PWR 12, CTR 11, RES 10, WIL 12]

    The Magnetic Fist (Jishaku Genkotsu)

    Stage 1: +3 Speed (Electric Spike Strike) [CTR 5, RES 3]
    Stage 2: +3 Speed (Magnetic Levitation) [CTR 7, RES 7, SPD 6]
    Stage 3: +3 Speed (Magnetic Rush; Magnetic Disarm) [CTR 10, RES 10, SPD 8]
    Stage 4: +3 Speed (Electric Surge Spike) [CTR 15, RES 14, PWR 14, SPD 8]

    Shoda Bloodline Limit: Lightning Body (Raikoukikan)

    Stage 1: Conductor - Recovery [CTR 3, RES 3, PWR 3]
    Stage 1: Conductor - Circuit Breaker [CTR 3, RES 3, PWR 3]
    Stage 2: Conductor - Tether [CTR 8, RES 8, PWR 6]
    Stage 2: Resistor - Ground [CTR 8, RES 8, PWR 6]

    Global Shinobi Arts (Ninjutsu)

    Stage 1: Transformation Technique (Henge no Jutsu) [CTR 3, INT 2]
    Stage 2: Wall Walking Technique (Kabenobori no Jutsu) [PWR 5, CTR 4, RES 4]


    [Inventory]

    Standard Issue Shinobi Kit (0 points)
    Handcuffs x2 (4 points)
    R-SAK Hand Radio (2 points)
    Electric Storm Bombs (1 point)
    Combat Knife (1 point)
    Item Points Remaining: 0

    [Biography]

    Originally posted by Intelligence Division // Internal Affairs / Annual Subject Review (4 of 4)



    in

    A happy childhood.



    So none of it was your own ambition?

    Too long ago to tell. You try to remember what motivated you twelve years ago.













    What did you do?



    How did this affect your brother?

    me

    Flag it up?







    Your sister survived the attack.



    But you had your team this time.





    was

    Did you return the favour?



    The first time you became a Chuunin.



    Not an unfair estimation, all things considered.

    Yeah, but all things considered, what would have happened if I had been involved this time?

    What did happen?



    Tell me about the bombings.

    Which part? The part where we realised someone was massacring refugees from inside

    Killed your brother.

    his





    Fracturing your squad, while you were stripped of your title. What was there for you?



    Like your romantic relationship with Saionji Miwa.

    those results. We knew it was a relationship of convenience rather than love, so we spared each other the broken hearts.

    Such a succinct summary. Did you practice that?

    Only a little. Want to hear more? My promotion, before you ask, came later that year, with Masaki moving on and the exams still fairly far away. Handpicking Private First Class Yamane Ren to keep with the theme of unity, I took all three of them out for a meal to lay my plans out on the table: my goal to get each of them to Chuunin status before the year was out and make ours the top Unity Squad in the entire LMG. No funny business. Hard work, but good work.

    While you were still aiming for that top spot in IA. As ambitious as a king.





    Because this is where it ends.


    [Other Information]

    =====================
    Surname, First Initial: Shoda, K
    Alias: The King's Man
    Company/Squad: Unity Squad 08
    Technical Occupation: Intelligence; Internal Affairs
    Military Rank: Sergeant
    =====================
    Birthplace: Shoda Clan Grounds
    Serial Number: 118621643924
    Specialisation: Lightning Release
    Chevrons: 6 Standard Grade
    Medals Earned: ---
    =====================
    Associations: Shoda family: Hisoka (father); Kotone
    (mother); Kei (sister); Kumiko (aunt)
    Declared Next of Kin: Shoda Kumiko (branch leader)
    Dependents: None
    Marital Status: Single
    =====================

    [Mission Log]

    Stormlight Adventures | The King's Man
    Theme: Memoirs of War & Peace
    • World Date 1.35 | Mission #00: Prelude to the Storm
      My country gives me strength, my clan gives me strength, my team gives me strength. It's time that I gave back.
      Character Creation AP (MAX): +3 Speed, +3 Willpower, +2 Intelligence, Electric Shock Clone, Deafen, Lightning Bolt.
      Advanced Chuunin Points: +3 Control, +2 Reserves, +1 Power, Detonation, Great Pulse, Lightning Instantaneous.
      Cloud Creation GMAP: Transformation, Wall Walking.


    • World Date 1.35 | Mission #01: Lightning's Heir
      Aim for the stars, shoot for the sky, and leave all your doubts at the door. This journey's just beginning.
      Perk Activated: AP Limit Breaker
      AP Awards: +3 Intelligence, +4 Tactics, Circuit Breaker, Ground, Magnetic Disarm.

  • #2
    your bio seems a bit short

    This caught me offguard:
    I had perfected my Stage One control
    I've never actually seen a character refer to a technique as 'stage one' or 'stage' anything. My understanding is that stages (like the stats) are abstractions and not something that actually exist in-character. If I'm wrong then it's fine, but I'd prefer to see something like 'basic of control' or something that doesn't show so much of Engi's game-rules skeleton.

    The shift from first person narrative to third person in the last part of the bio is extremely jarring. For the first few sentences I was wondering who this 'Kagero' person was. Maybe ease into it a bit better?

    Stats and numbers all check out. Given that your bio is quite comprehensive I'm sure there are details that those more knowledgeable about Cloud can go over better than I can. I'll Half-Approve anyway.
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    • #3
      I know, it could do to be longer...

      Thank you, Junge.

      You're probably right about the Stages thing. As I'd included so few references to the system in that way, I went ahead and changed them like you suggested.

      I also added a narrator's footnote at the end of the Ascension section, as well as a return to biographical form in that last part. Hopefully, it's not as jarring now, but if you have any advice on how to make it even smoother, I'm all ears. Hopefully, short of explicitly referring to the third person omniscient, what I've done will be alright.

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      • #4
        Half-approved

        AP - Swaps - Weapons/Items

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        • #5
          It's in the hands of fate Kaen now.

          Half Approved.
          (Rain Chuunin) Oichi Josuke | (Sand Chuunin) Sawamatsu no Motonubu | (Leaf Chuunin) Hyuuga Kannon
          (Retired Grass Chuunin) Shinshi Gemmei | (Snow Genin) Gonnohyoe | (Mist Genin) Kurusu Ringo
          (Brigade of Light) Chosokabe Muneshige | (Leaf Chuunin) Hong Feiyan
          Shichou Clan GM - Shichou Mission Thread Here!
          Brigade of Light GM - Missions and More!
          I will do any thread, anywhere, anytime. Just PM me!
          Wizlab | Swaps | (AP) | RIP

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          • #6
            Well, until fate comes around... here's another Half

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            • #7
              I like Kagero, though an initial point of concern in his bio that pops out to me is the spot when you've named Rikiya's child. The reason I'm apprehensive about that is because I don't want that to hamstring anyone else who might want to create a Shoda under his branch, and was interested in being a direct child. This would have then forced a character/section of bio they may not have been keen about.

              Other than that, like I said, I like Kagero. I'll have to do another round and just make sure the family timelines make sense.

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              • #8
                I also now realise that I haven't followed naming conventions for said character. That being said, it's probably in everybody's best interest that I simply generalise this point and remove specifics.

                I'm very glad that you like him, though

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                • #9
                  I'm fine with people breaking the convention if it serves a purpose (which it does with Ichirou), but I just didn't want the book to be written for someone else, which I'm sure you can understand

                  From what I can tell, things look fine. Kaen will have to go over the history of events from a Cloud perspective...but the only thing I noticed is that Kagero would have been 7 when the Shoda were pulled out of exile, and currently you have him as age 9 when it happens (unless I misread it). Just a small thing.

                  Other than that, consider this clan GM approved, though I'm pretty sure that doesn't count towards your regular required number of approvals.

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                  • #10
                    Originally posted by Res View Post
                    I'm fine with people breaking the convention if it serves a purpose (which it does with Ichirou), but I just didn't want the book to be written for someone else, which I'm sure you can understand

                    From what I can tell, things look fine. Kaen will have to go over the history of events from a Cloud perspective...but the only thing I noticed is that Kagero would have been 7 when the Shoda were pulled out of exile, and currently you have him as age 9 when it happens (unless I misread it). Just a small thing.
                    Totally. All's good in the hood now.

                    I could have sworn I had that age progression worked out. It was one of the toughest things to reconcile between the two histories and his own personality progression. I do have him as 9. I can probably rephrase that easily enough to account for the time difference there, but then that throws off everything else. I think, originally, I had him as older, but wanted a younger chuunin about half way through writing. I'll have to pick through this and course correct as necessary.

                    EDIT: I have advanced him a year to 20 now, so he's 8 when the Shoda return to the fold, 13 when Hideyoshi sides with Denryuu Konishi (and when he starts to take an interest in girls, which was the reason for the shift, because 12 was too young), then 16 when Nagai triumphs. Whew. Edits done. Short but painful
                    Last edited by Calibur; 11-07-2014, 05:15 PM.

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                    • #11
                      Okay, your personal/long terms goals are not decided in character creation. They don't fit with the guidelines I've laid out and I'm not going to waste space in registry talking about it. You can remove it and apply normally through the cloud roster, or we can discuss the details via PM.

                      Your bio is so much ridiculously longer than it needs to be. I ended up skimming it like a stuffy old textbook. The only reason I'm not just telling you to tl;dr is that Res already approved it and I've kept you waiting way too long. The details seem okay with me so far, and while there were no listed 'reeducation' in information on Nagai's side in info, I'm willing to fudge things to allow your story to work.

                      Once we take care of your goals, whether that's discuss it over PM or remove it here to apply in the roster later, you can consider your character approved.
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                      • #12
                        I'm not going to write anything nearly as comprehensive for any of my future characters (their bios will be minute by comparison), but as my Advanced unit Kagero had to be more. And how he writes in his memoirs - not to mention the length he goes to for an honest, personal account - will tell you a lot about the character. Nothing stuffy about that.

                        The 'reeducation' directives form part of my exploration of war and the idea that this conflict, as with others, is rarely a case of right vs wrong/good vs evil - that there are heroes and villains on both sides...even from within Nagai's ranks, by individuals who could be considered war criminals. It all depends how we frame it and act on these revelations...

                        Thanks for fudging it though. Means a lot that I can finally get this guy off the starting blocks and get closure on the registry (until my next rebel/warrior/poet passes through)
                        Last edited by Calibur; 03-04-2015, 07:09 PM.

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                        • #13
                          I feel like a bit of an ass, from the way I reacted, and the way I hide under my covers when it was pointed out. I'm sorry about that.

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                          ~ Tsuriau Clan GM

                          Please Use [They/Them] Pronouns For Me.
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                          Kyou ~ Collared Cat| Masuyo ~ Lurking Liar | Rina ~ Serial Adventuress
                          Shiori ~ Cynical Seer | Kinsha ~ Pure Poison | Miyu ~ Amoral Mage

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